Walking in Snow shoes.

[Keith]

I feel the imperfections,
ions in each unique wood flake, not sure that ions as electric charge really fits, could you drop the comma after imperfections remove ions and change in to on?
aching under silent fields of snow;
onerous gram weighted peeks and troughs.

Offers of pristine carbon dated sheets
eat at tired thoughts that slide, eat at sounds blunt could you add away or something else to smooth the line
idle in freefall, foot prepped they stretch; I like the alliteration and the starlings below is a delightful image.
etched clouds of sun-downing starlings. Im just not sure stretched /etched does this justice,

Lingering they cling; half formed ideas,
earless dreary droplets on bare branches.
Essence starved, highly metalled, they drip
rippled dross that cools on the un-tilled field. Nothing to crit love this stanza and the way it visualises thought

Eldritch forces shield the pressed perfection, I had to googleto understand but that is probably just me. on which fragments of calm collide and splinter. I like this line but could look at on which.
Terse aborted concepts leap sky-born,
ornate in flight they swirl in flightless flocks. great image

Oxygen boosted the fledglings flee, a great clearing of the head
easing off the aborted roost; a reflective river aborted has been used in previous stanza
verse that swirls in random bursts of unborn images,
gestated under a clouded sun-lit canopy. This is a visual extravaganza but could do with a small trim and perhaps shaded rather than clouded so as to keep the sun lit.

Peels of thoughts switch and swoop low;
own the virgin field of snow, by virtue of a kiss.
Issues melt, the fluid thought compacts,
acts upon a single, graphite drop and falls. I would be tempted to close on this line and leave the edit for another poem but that's just me talking, and I think this is a killer last line.

Alternate climatic creative waves; twice I stumbled over this it could be the tree syllables of Alternate climatic is just too much, if that makes sense,
ice hard dead upon the page are left unread.
Edited, the final decent is progressive and smooth;
the imperfections are covered and soothed. This is a good ending so my previous comments could well be wrong and just my gut talking.

Hopefully some others will step up to the plate and I'll see you back at base. best K