09-21-2013, 03:30 PM
Malu,
"Succulent nectar" seems redundant.
"deep down" ditto.
Of course the real problem I have with this is it seems to have nothing to do with the title. A spell (I am assuming magic spell, as nothing else makes sense) generally list ingredients or actions that achieve a result, I don't really see that here. I went and checked the definition of "spell" and there were no definition of which I was unaware.
Also, as nectar is generally just sugar water, I don't really see a connection between that an "Epitome of flavor". Maybe "Epitome of sweetness".
Sorry, but this just seems as though you threw these words together without much thought for what they actually meant. I'd be happy to be wrong, but that's the way it seems at the moment.
Dale
"Succulent nectar" seems redundant.
"deep down" ditto.
Of course the real problem I have with this is it seems to have nothing to do with the title. A spell (I am assuming magic spell, as nothing else makes sense) generally list ingredients or actions that achieve a result, I don't really see that here. I went and checked the definition of "spell" and there were no definition of which I was unaware.
Also, as nectar is generally just sugar water, I don't really see a connection between that an "Epitome of flavor". Maybe "Epitome of sweetness".
Sorry, but this just seems as though you threw these words together without much thought for what they actually meant. I'd be happy to be wrong, but that's the way it seems at the moment.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.