09-20-2013, 03:55 AM
Thank you, Leanne. Any and all comments are welcome. After reading other poetry on this site, sharing my own feels very nerve racking. I do feel like a novice in comparison.
Thank you again for being kind. You should see how many drafts of this poem I have!
I will remove the "a" from "i crave a maddening fire. "
Do you think it would help to just remove "this" from the "dry, half hearted lust" line? I pondered over that line for a long time.
Thank you again for being kind. You should see how many drafts of this poem I have!
I will remove the "a" from "i crave a maddening fire. "
Do you think it would help to just remove "this" from the "dry, half hearted lust" line? I pondered over that line for a long time.