King's Decree

[Snowbells]

In form it looks like a sonnet, but its wording is somewhat unclear, even unnatural. As the name "sonnet" in the translation suggests, this poetry form is "a little song." As such, it should be free of twisted sentences (inverted word order). Part of line 11 needs to be restructured. Also, gain and fame? "Starred" is correct, but do you need that little scratch above the "e") J.