Elegy

[71degrees]

"cannot bear what
you had to offer"

I'd like to hear your reasoning for the tense change here. It rings as off, but that may be just what you want.

A lovely read.


Thanks for your response. Appreciate it. Tense change is b/c "you" has passed away. Since the person is no longer living, it rings as past tense.

71degrees

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i really want to understand this because i like it.
the title sort of explains the poem is about moving on but not just yet.
then on the other hand it feels a little like the 1st person is angry with
2nd person who passed on.

anyway, if i had constructive feedback it would be to let me in on it a bit more

thanks for the read.



Thanks for the reply. Nothing really to let you in on. You've got it.

71degrees