09-16-2013, 10:29 PM
Hi, I really enjoyed this.
Ladies just needs its apostrophe, ladies'.
This poem pulled me right through to the end, a beautiful story about the change a short encounter can make.
"unravels a memory, takes her back"
might be smoother unraveling, taking. But maybe not.
I know this is meager critique, but thanks for the fine read.
Ladies just needs its apostrophe, ladies'.
This poem pulled me right through to the end, a beautiful story about the change a short encounter can make.
"unravels a memory, takes her back"
might be smoother unraveling, taking. But maybe not.
I know this is meager critique, but thanks for the fine read.
billy wrote:welcome to the site. make it your own, wear it like a well loved slipper and wear it out. ella pleads:please click forum titles for posting guidelines, important threads. New poet? Try Poetic DevicesandWard's Tips