A Likely Story

[BigRed]

Not bad, but something I would really try to focus on for next time:

-Aim for a particular meter or rhyming scheme. You'd be amazed at what a difference this makes to readability and understandability.

Although, I have to say, I love the last two lines

Respectfully, I would disagree. I was actually going to say I quite enjoyed the poem because it flowed so well without a particular rhyming scheme. In fact, I think that's the beauty of it because even sans a scheme of that sort, it still felt almost rhythmic, anyhow.

Personally, I am not a big fan of rhyming, as I used to be because I feel it constrains the poem too much and often contrives it.

I would suggest maybe playing around with another line instead of "I was born infinite yesterdays ago." Seems a tad generic to me. Otherwise, interesting work!