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A Likely Story

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09-15-2013, 11:49 AM

Not bad, but something I would really try to focus on for next time:

-Aim for a particular meter or rhyming scheme. You'd be amazed at what a difference this makes to readability and understandability.

Although, I have to say, I love the last two lines Smile

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A Likely Story - by leftover sushi - 09-13-2013, 03:10 PM

RE: A Likely Story - by SilverMire - 09-15-2013, 11:49 AM

RE: A Likely Story - by BigRed - 09-16-2013, 05:13 AM

RE: A Likely Story - by ScurryFunger - 09-16-2013, 02:59 AM

RE: A Likely Story - by newsclippings - 09-16-2013, 05:21 AM

RE: A Likely Story - by Keith - 09-16-2013, 05:39 AM

RE: A Likely Story - by Titania - 09-16-2013, 08:36 AM

RE: A Likely Story - by heslopian - 09-16-2013, 10:42 AM

RE: A Likely Story - by ellajam - 09-16-2013, 11:42 AM

RE: A Likely Story - by OrganicPoetTree - 09-16-2013, 02:33 PM

RE: A Likely Story - by leftover sushi - 09-16-2013, 10:46 PM

RE: A Likely Story - by ScurryFunger - 09-20-2013, 02:03 AM

RE: A Likely Story - by billy - 09-30-2013, 12:06 PM

RE: A Likely Story - by Wildcard - 09-17-2013, 12:44 AM

RE: A Likely Story - by soxboy3 - 09-17-2013, 01:34 AM

RE: A Likely Story - by tigrflye - 09-19-2013, 02:13 PM

RE: A Likely Story - by Erthona - 09-30-2013, 02:21 PM

RE: A Likely Story - by Malu - 10-10-2013, 05:19 AM

RE: A Likely Story - by DestWrites - 10-11-2013, 04:18 PM

RE: A Likely Story - by jringo_ - 10-12-2013, 03:15 AM

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