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Jilted John Edit 1

Jilted John Edit 1
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09-14-2013, 07:47 AM
Ooh-aah, that's rude!

I like what's going on with the rhymes -- I'd love to see the meter fixed up a little bit but that's a minor problem since it's all for fun. Nice to see Mr Benn making an appearance, if only in a simile Smile
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Messages In This Thread
Jilted John Edit 1 - by Keith - 09-14-2013, 07:40 AM
RE: Jilted John - by Leanne - 09-14-2013, 07:47 AM
RE: Jilted John - by Keith - 09-15-2013, 06:24 AM
RE: Jilted John - by Savanna - 09-14-2013, 09:15 AM
RE: Jilted John - by ChristopherSea - 09-15-2013, 06:34 AM
RE: Jilted John - by Keith - 09-15-2013, 10:40 AM
RE: Jilted John - by tectak - 09-16-2013, 02:57 AM
RE: Jilted John Edit 1 - by Keith - 09-28-2013, 07:52 AM



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