New Year

[billy]

i like the opening two lines a lot, specially the image of the 2nd line
look out for word repetition, look out for phrases that say the same thing unless you're reinforcing something.

Hi, all. This is my second poem posted here. If I am in the wrong forum, sorry! Thank you for reading and critiquing!


New Year

Whiskey-warm and sick of New Years' Eve,
I left the stuffed ones herded by their fires love the start.
And trudged along a path of ashen leaves
That cracked and snapped with winter’s snowy choirs.
The ice cursed trees with bones that shook and scraped
The skull-gray skies of rotting winter days we get it, it's winter
Were wan and mute of vernal song and draped
A cold lament upon my frostsick haze.

The scene was gaunt and dying still
When I had turned to leave
Until I heard a piercing shrill
Cry deep within the trees —

An inky crow shot out of sight
And left me frozen in the night. great couplet with a great image