Making Use of the White Space

[EileenGreay]

Sorry Eileen,

If you were referring about the literal white space, then I would suggest you read more poems that do actually use the white space.
People do all kinds of things with the position of the words on the page (indent, moving lines up and down, etc.). I can go back and show other things you might want to think about in terms of word placement.

I have seen some extremely effective uses of line and word placement to back the poem. Most free verse (including yours) make very limited use. The page is 2-D, so there is a lot you can do.

By the way, you weren't alluding to Judas in your poem. It would be nice if people looked up what allusion is.
Bill

Ah, my dear, it would also be lovely if people looked up the term 'blank space' before instructing people in how to best utilise it! I'd also remind you that I never claimed to be alluding to anything (I merely used a name in my title). I was merely relabelling what you had mistakenly labelled as 'blank space'.

If I were the one caught incorrectly using terminology, I think I would apologise for the incorrect usage, rather than accusing others of fault. Perhaps something for you to keep in mind?

I hope this does not offend you, Bill. If you are so adamant that others learn from you, you must also be willing to accept the possibility that you are incorrect and have much to learn from others.

Eileen