The Sun Has Set Slowly, But Fully Now (sonnet number two)

[leftover sushi]

The sun has set slowly, but fully now,
beneath a scene of dim suburbs and sky.
I should be asleep, but I'm thinking of how
much it hurts: I never got to say goodbye.

I saw you, but I couldn't come near.
Time moved on, and my dreams faded away.
Trapped by my shyness, your beauty my fear,
what should have been love I doomed to decay.

I wipe off my tears as I think of your smile
that bright, warm Spring day when I gave you a rose.
Without you, alone, I dream for awhile,
as outside my window the cool, Fall wind blows.

Trapped with you, and only you, bound in memories,
my happiness is dying, dry as Autumn's leaves.

You need to be more creative with your rhyming. In the first stanza alone, just think of how many times someone has rhymed now and how, and sky with goodbye. it's just boring to read rhymes like that because they are so predictable. sorry to be harsh.