09-09-2013, 08:20 AM
The original poem was about inspiring fear into someone all in the hopes of making them beasts. And how the narrator's past conditioning allows him to put the Coach's words into perspective. It would nice if people actually examined the poem.
I would recommend reading this aloud...there are parts which don't seem to flow, like:
activities that make more sense
(though it is funny hearing sense and poetry together.)
In the final stanza, you easily could expand the idea past the resident coach, because these coaches (like in football) are all over the place.
when Coach Critic white-outs my poetry.
As for all the talk about discipline...there are a lot of good American football coaches who don't rant and rave at their players and still instill discipline into them.
a few thoughts,
Bill
I would recommend reading this aloud...there are parts which don't seem to flow, like:
activities that make more sense
(though it is funny hearing sense and poetry together.)
In the final stanza, you easily could expand the idea past the resident coach, because these coaches (like in football) are all over the place.
when Coach Critic white-outs my poetry.
As for all the talk about discipline...there are a lot of good American football coaches who don't rant and rave at their players and still instill discipline into them.
a few thoughts,
Bill