The Birds of the Summer

[btrudo]

I'd appreciate some help on this one, thanks in advance.

Fluttering frantically
nestled to the side
of their bath
filled to the brim
splashing, stretching
spilling water to the garden bed
refugees
from the blistering summer heat
family
bonding in simplicity
in simplicity...
content to breathe.

I do think some of the sounds quite nicely bring alive the moment...I think the alliteration is very appropriate.
Fluttering frantically
splashing, stretching, spilling
bath filled to the brim

Also refugee is a great word choice.

A question is where does this scene hold itself in the larger scene. I don't know if there is a large scene, but that's okay. The attempt at the end appears that you want to put this into a larger scene.

I removed some -ings to get more action...
here's a take on the scene (this is just based on birds splashing and doesn't incorporate what you have at the end):
Birds of Summer

A frantically fluttering family
at the edge of the bath filled to the brim,
their wings contract, stretch, splash and dash.
Leaping water dives to garden—play
for these refugees of blistering heat.

All I can say...write YOUR writing, though I do think some chaos and fun would be appropriate for this moment. Find that scene in your head and listen to the music of the action, your words. This can take some time sometimes.

a few thoughts,
Bill