Morning Despair
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It was a bit hard to pinpoint exactly what emotions you were trying to convey. It seemed a bit all over the place. I sense confusion and the poem might work more if you adopted that as the predominant tone. There was also Anger, love, resentment, regret. It was hard to keep up.
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Morning Despair - by Reilley - 09-05-2013, 08:37 AM
RE: Morning Despair - by Spikerider - 09-05-2013, 10:52 AM
RE: Morning Despair - by Elsie Fillmore - 09-06-2013, 09:50 AM
RE: Morning Despair - by shenaz - 09-06-2013, 06:56 PM
RE: Morning Despair - by Reilley - 09-06-2013, 09:19 PM
RE: Morning Despair - by shenaz - 09-06-2013, 09:36 PM
RE: Morning Despair - by ScurryFunger - 09-09-2013, 07:52 AM



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