Lunar Glow

[milo]

Hello allykat, good to see you again. I hope you did well in your creative writing course.

I’m loving Night,
for Moon is bright
and Sky is thick
with Clouds.

it looks like you are attempting to anthropomorphicize Night, Moon, Sky and Clouds here(?). "for" definitely doesn't work here. "I'm loving" instead of "I love" is strange as well. It tries to identify with a specific instance which would lead to a narrative but it is never realised. There is nothing either new or original about bright moons in poetry.

Yellow softens
darkened Blue,
blending, circling
Milk-White Moon.

I confess, I can't figure out why you are capitalizing some words. So far. you have 2 stanzas describing the moon and the sky at night. Since there is really nothing new in the description and no symbolism or metaphor that I can make out, I am starting to wonder when we will get to the poem.

And rainbow Light
shines out in rays
through billowed haze
of smoky Sky,
splitting shadowed,
blackened Night.

Rainbows don't really exist at night, as far as I know. At this point, the endless description of your night is starting to get a bit boring.

For when Moon’s light
takes ashen Sky,
flecks of silver emphasize
that beauty sits
in seas of Clouds
who beg and brood
‘neath dark Night Sky
and vibrate out
of Moon’s bright Light.

"'neath" really has no place in modern poetry (with the exception of satire).

As a whole, I feel like this little vignette wastes too many words and doesn't really accomplish much. All I got from the whole poem is that your narrator likes pretty nights and the moon, but I don't think that is enough.

I feel like all of this could be condensed into a haiku and still say more through a juxtaposition.

Thanks for posting.

Good to see you again.