09-02-2013, 11:35 AM
There are some interesting things here, but it isn't very compelling and there aren't many lines or images that are memorable. First thing I would suggest is to rewrite the first lines to read: "is the scythe Christ will use" so not only does it refer to the title but is more immediate, concise and poetic. You should also consider using more creative word choices. "reap" and "taste my blade of wrath" are flat and don't do a whole lot for the reader.