Senryu (August 28, 2013) (Edit)
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(08-28-2013, 11:41 AM)Volaticus Wrote:  Edit

frailty
eclipsed
time fleets


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perpetual sundial
penumbra
ephemeral being
i'm still not getting it.

this isn't the poem but what i'm seeing it as (it's not a rewrite Wink)

frailty
eclipsed
time fleets

age
death
time passes.

i'm not sure if that right and with such a short form i should really be more sure.
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Senryu (August 28, 2013) (Edit) - by Volaticus - 08-28-2013, 11:41 AM
RE: Senryu (August 28, 2013) - by billy - 08-28-2013, 12:50 PM
RE: Senryu (August 28, 2013) - by Volaticus - 08-29-2013, 12:16 AM
RE: Senryu (August 28, 2013) (Edit) - by billy - 08-30-2013, 12:50 PM
RE: Senryu (August 28, 2013) (Edit) - by Graystar - 11-03-2013, 03:30 PM



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