I Miss You

[tectak]

I Miss You
I miss the memories we've made...
Ecstasy that was worth fighting for.
Together we roamed the road merrily,
and with it followed a casualty.
And with the weight of the heavens,
you were silenced.
Why did you take your life
and not talk to me!?
The burning passion is promptly fading...
Infatuation wasted on a serenade.
And even though I am angry,
I miss you...

-Robbie Reaper

Hi robbie,
This may sound like semantics but L1 says you "miss the memories" which can only mean you cannot remember the memories and if you cannot remember memories you don't know you are missing them...and if you DO know you are missing them then you have remembered them and they are not missing.Hmmm.
Structurally this is dire. Too many "ands" with no considered linking. What on earth does "followed a casualty" mean?
The problem is lack of planning. You are just joining together cliches in a chain.
worth fighting for
roamed the road
weight of heavens
take your life
burning passion

...and promptly is not used correctly. You want it to mean "quickly" or even too quickly...whereas "promptly" means in good time or as planned.
You need to put more soul and less smart into it.
Best,
tectak