Into the Throes

[ChristopherSea]

I believe this was meant to be a spoken word piece and as such loses some steam in poetry form without hearing the emotional voice behind the words. It's very difficult to pull off an interesting effective political diatribe. I admit that I laughed at monetized pulp, but it did stick in my head. I agree that this one has too many descriptors and it meanders too much in theme from existentialism, to economics, to environment, to god give us earth, to god may not exist (or he is a metaphor), to death, then freedom and whatever else I missed. However, there seems to be an effort to express passion. Therefore, I would recommend capturing one of the themes here and use to create your monolog, but clarify the message and then elaborate.