mild celebrity

[newsclippings]

1st edit

She thought she was the epitome of cosmopolitan...

She painted her nails red
while listening to the gay disco hits,
a martini glass on a coaster made of cork.

Plucked and tweezed and oiled and waxed
to a cocoa-butter tanned perfection.

A man in her distant past had purchased her,
had stayed away while the bandages were present this line gives me trouble because the first isn't all that descriptive and it succeeds the last stanza as though it needs a pause when it doesn't.
then later tucked her arm through his to show
his ownership.
He wanted to inspire jealousy and awe,
but all he received were telling looks
and an underlying sympathy for her. Too much. Would you mind rephrasing?

Inevitably she was discarded roughly and without mercy,I would revise this. Roughly... eh.
shrugged off like an outgrown skin.
She twittered, birdlike for a while,
it never really did sink in.

She continued with her ritual maintenance eh.
so practised she was, at worshipping herself
with a blank-faced, smooth-lined stare.this is a great line

Sanity slowly slipped from her mind's grasp,
she had a tattoo, delighted in the small pleasure
of the pain. A copied version of a un-glossy picture an?
in a magazine filled to the brim with d-list personalities.

She longed for a d-list life.the?
Like a religion she studied the form of her contemporaries
inwardly seething at those who she deemed to 'have it all.'

She lurched, in an ever downward spiral
from successful man to moderate man to loser.

Her scars had faded years ago,
although the mascara build-up on her lashes
could have filled a bucket full of lost dreams.

She kept her fingernails red.
She still bought the magazines.

She twitched and floundered like
a several minutes out of water fish.

Then, one day, she realised and accepted
what it was that she was meant to be,
she put on her fake jewellery,
knowing that it was representative of her fake life.

She bought a bottle of vodka a day and gave in.

I think a lot of these stanzas need revisiting and rewording. The theme is new though. Kind of interesting, but I think you get lost in the story and leave us with little to ponder about.