Bird (edit 2)

[ChristopherSea]

Nice edit, but correct the typos and some grammer:

Thnx for reading/critiquing.

Most of the critique made sense and i'll certainly fix the errors however
I have two questions,

If I were to change the first line to "A somber sparrow" as you suggested would it still be evident that I was referring to the sparrow in the line "I realize you"? As it stands it feels like the narrator is speaking to the bird but i'm not sure if that would be as clear if I put an "a" before "somber sparrow" also, I thought "realize" was correct but maybe "acknowledge" makes more sense, I guess that isn't really a question more of a concern. I think on that ill try to get a second opinion. that. Thnx again

Yes, it still addresses the bird. You can have both narration and monolog in a poem. It seemed like you needed something preceding 'somber'. 'My', would work too or you may leave it the way it was. As for 'I realize you.' it just sounds peculiar to me without an action after it (eg I realize you were cheated in life). Other replacements like acknowledge, recognize, understand or another phrase like 'I feel for you' stand better by themselves. If you would not say it, don't use it is a rule of thumb. However, do use what you like best, you don't need to gather a consensus. All critques are just suggestions.