Bed

[Apophrades]

As I lay on my pillow in bed You didn't have to write 'in bed', lying on a pillow suggests that. You only did it to make a rhyme.
I dream and ponder thoughts of her in my head. I think you should distinguish between dreaming and conscious thinking. "Thoughts" in this line is redundant.
Though the pain I suffer is miserable and tough
My longing to see her is equal enough"Pain" and "longing" are different for everyone, try explaining your experience of them through figurative language, that way your writing becomes less trite, more unique.
For sometime now my heart has been jaded I don't like how you've used the adjective "jaded", it doesn't make sense in this context.
A lost loves deep sorrows which have cascaded There is something grammatically wrong with this line. I can't tell you what it is because I don't know what you're trying to say. Try looking at the S's.
The lord has a plan its detaisl unknown
Though he always blesses with a chance to atone
I remember the time I saw saw her at first
All my friends in awe quickly dispersed
For her beauty is unrivaled, no one can compare There are many lines in your piece like this one, that have redundant phrases. I can't be bothered going through them all. If her beauty is unrivalled, that is the same as saying no one can compare.
Not even the heavens or stars in the air
Charlie would say I was just a wall flower Cool perks reference, very hip.
But who would have known she would be my sunflower
For her beauty lies deeper than makeup and hair
A love so innocent, Im so scared to share
But Im grateful for the time that was spent
Though the feelings and emotions were never meant
I can only confess the happiness she brings
A smile and laugh that makes my heart sing
And though it's a tune that someday will end
It is a song that will play forever in my head
For I will never forget the touch of her skin
A kiss on her neck as she lay in my bed

This piece is a cliche. Try reading some canonical poetry. You will get a feel for what readers are looking for.