Bed

[TheWall0912]

I think the thoughts and feelings behind this poem have potential but they are masked by the rhymes and structure. I definitely agree that your rhyming is driving your poem. I would suggest playing around with wording. I too like to rhyme when I write poems but sometimes it is difficult to make your thoughts rhyme. I would also change up the meter, some of your lines (ex: It is a song that will play forever in my head) are just too long and throw off the reader. See if you can make all of your lines have the same amount of syllables, it will make it a lot easier to read and have a better flow.

Just my opinions though, good start!