sheep dog

[SunRose]

There he goes my sheep dog Ship!
Ship skips down the green grassy fields
for a treat of something meaty.

There Ship goes though the wheat grassland.
Slyly he stands guarding his lost friends.
They follow his command,
obeying every move he makes.

There Ship makes his final stand.
I want my bone now
not after the job is done.

"My life is a bone on the ground,
and these sheep are my friends
that where lost now found."
Up to this point this poem reads like a children's picture book to me

I thought myself. Confusing line

How am I to protect you
and the sheep if I am to spend
all my money on stinking pigs bones?
The word stinking seems not in the "mood" of the rest of the poem

"Ship, you must sail,
not for the fish in the sea.
But for my daughter son and me."
I thought these three lines were cute and a nice message - do things to help others, not just for yourself

Ship licked his lips and got
his old meaty bone.

He admired the bones fine
shape and tone.
This sounds like a line out of a smutty romance novel

Then Ship set sail for a new land
with his friends, the land of the unknown.

Overall this seems to have good potential, but maybe consider a few serious rewrites. The thought of a sheep dog ship is very funny (thank you Kitchens for the laugh!), but that line didn't read that way to me until I read the response post.