Short Story: Yellow
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I liked it, thought the focus of yellow in the beginning was a bit much. After that first few sentences you were more subtle in incorporating it. The one thing, a little old lady with a gold stapler, I get the impression she hit Penn with it.
If so, it just seems unlikely she could come down with enough force to knock a man out. Either that or Penn passed out. That is my uncertainty. Good little effort, wasn't long and read smoothly.
I once told this blond chick to screw in a light bulb..

She got naked and asked "how do I get in it?"
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Yellow - by newsclippings - 08-13-2013, 05:31 PM
RE: Yellow - by ChristopherSea - 08-13-2013, 10:21 PM
RE: Yellow - by newsclippings - 08-14-2013, 10:49 AM
RE: Yellow - by R.C. KITCHENS - 08-14-2013, 12:29 PM
RE: Yellow - by newsclippings - 08-14-2013, 05:11 PM
RE: Yellow - by Keith - 08-15-2013, 03:14 AM
RE: Yellow - by newsclippings - 08-15-2013, 04:19 AM
RE: Yellow - by billy - 08-15-2013, 10:21 AM
RE: Yellow - by R.C. KITCHENS - 08-15-2013, 10:26 AM
RE: Yellow - by billy - 08-15-2013, 01:31 PM
RE: Yellow - by milo - 08-15-2013, 01:55 PM
RE: Yellow - by newsclippings - 08-15-2013, 03:04 PM
RE: Yellow - by milo - 08-15-2013, 03:12 PM



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