08-11-2013, 05:03 AM
Thank you for your very kind feedback, Ms. Greay, and welcome to the Pig Pen!
I wasn't conscious of those Keats references, but I'm flattered that you saw them. Your semi-colon suggestion is excellent and will be utilised immediately. That last line left me feeling slightly dissastisfied, and I think you've put your finger on why.
I wasn't conscious of those Keats references, but I'm flattered that you saw them. Your semi-colon suggestion is excellent and will be utilised immediately. That last line left me feeling slightly dissastisfied, and I think you've put your finger on why.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe