Sight

[fim]

I am not invisible

I border on transparent

You’ll notice me when no one is else is there

but I disappear so easily in a crowd

[I don't really know if I would consider this poetry or not but it was something I wrote(and could not title properly) and just thought I'd share it with you guys. Maybe some will enjoy it. Maybe someone won't. Either way I appreciate feedback very much.]

brandonalsip,
I agree with fogglethorpe, L1 & L2 seem to contradict each other. L3 has a confusing, unnecessary "is." Again I agree with fogglethorpe, you have something (worthwhile, in my opinion) to say ... just need to ruminate a bit more on your feelings and then flesh out your poem.
If I understand where you are coming from, maybe in L2 you are talking about a condition that is more "opaque" than "transparent."
Look forward to your first-edit embellishment!
fim