To Be English

To Be English

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#23

08-07-2013, 05:16 AM

I like this poem, especially the 'ice cream' lines. But, IMHO,
I think the poem would be a much stronger one if you ended it
with "like the streetwalkers they've become". (And yes, this suggestion
is too simplistic.)

all this useless beauty... but what the hell, why not?

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To Be English - by heslopian - 07-30-2013, 10:26 AM

RE: To Be English - by Wildcard - 07-30-2013, 12:46 PM

RE: To Be English - by heslopian - 07-30-2013, 07:25 PM

RE: To Be English - by billy - 07-30-2013, 06:18 PM

RE: To Be English - by ray - 07-30-2013, 08:35 PM

RE: To Be English - by cidermaid - 07-30-2013, 08:46 PM

RE: To Be English - by heslopian - 07-30-2013, 10:19 PM

RE: To Be English - by billy - 07-31-2013, 10:48 AM

RE: To Be English - by heslopian - 07-31-2013, 10:58 PM

RE: To Be English - by serge gurkski - 08-04-2013, 02:19 PM

RE: To Be English - by StevieFinn - 08-05-2013, 07:48 AM

RE: To Be English - by ray - 08-05-2013, 06:55 PM

RE: To Be English - by heslopian - 08-05-2013, 10:06 PM

RE: To Be English - by StevieFinn - 08-05-2013, 11:56 PM

RE: To Be English - by StevieFinn - 08-06-2013, 07:49 AM

RE: To Be English - by heslopian - 08-06-2013, 08:48 AM

RE: To Be English - by billy - 08-06-2013, 09:43 AM

RE: To Be English - by Wildcard - 08-06-2013, 12:49 PM

RE: To Be English - by heslopian - 08-06-2013, 01:00 PM

RE: To Be English - by serge gurkski - 08-06-2013, 03:02 PM

RE: To Be English - by tectak - 08-06-2013, 10:35 PM

RE: To Be English - by heslopian - 08-07-2013, 03:08 AM

RE: To Be English - by rayheinrich - 08-07-2013, 05:16 AM

RE: To Be English - by Green Ink - 08-07-2013, 08:25 AM

RE: To Be English - by tectak - 08-07-2013, 04:53 PM

RE: To Be English - by heslopian - 08-07-2013, 11:39 PM

RE: To Be English - by rayheinrich - 08-08-2013, 05:57 AM

RE: To Be English - by heslopian - 08-08-2013, 06:12 AM

RE: To Be English - by Achebe - 06-30-2016, 07:08 PM

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