Impossible Waters

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I enjoyed aspects of this, I am new to poetry so maybe take my input with a grain of salt.

Impossible waters

fill our sky with dreams
for fishers and for flyers This made me think of fly fishing because of the words fishers and flyers,maybe something to consider idk

sow nightmares within timorous minds
of mountains dark and deadly Ok tone changes for me here feels a lot darker

cover oceans like sheets This line might be close to coming off as cliche, but regardless I like the metaphore
or vanish in cascades

constant and fickle
steadfast and wavering

unfeeling, cold, impermanent structures
inspiring life immemorial

atmospheric murals redone a million times over
always changing, always beautiful not sure if I liked the repeating of always here felt a bit blunt but perhaps that was intentional

if heaven must be, it is walking on impossible waters
drowning in delicate vapors like the breath of God Beautiful last line here (:

I think I read this a bit too literally as I assumed it had to do with an ocean or water more so then the sky or clouds. Actually I was thinking of impossible waters as more of a metaphysical inner space, and that it had to either do with some sort of ambition or yeah the ocean. After you said it was about clouds I did like some of the lines more. Thinking of clouds as "unfeeling, cold, impermanent structures" does have potential to be bit poignant. Nice poem.

I hope somehting I typed helped. Again i'm new to poetry this is my first time trying to critique a poem.