The Day the Birds Died

[Volaticus]

The first couple of lines seemed promising, but it kind of fell apart for me as I read on. It feels very telly and lecturing, and though I like the theme you chose and feel strongly about it, the poem didn't evoke any of those feelings in me, I'm afraid.
I'll look forward to a read an edit of this poem, should you decide to make one.
-LB