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08-05-2013, 05:57 PM
(This post was last modified: 08-05-2013, 05:59 PM by billy.)
(08-01-2013, 10:42 PM)jdguyb Wrote: This poem needs punctuation. Also it seems like a story instead of a poem
we need a little bit more than a stock reply. why does it need punctuation. what makes it seem like a story? try and expand some of your feedback, it'll get easier the more you do
(08-02-2013, 10:42 AM)GoldWinger Wrote: Seems a little forced to read. Doesn't flow well. IMHO
we need a little bit more than a stock reply. where does it seem forced and why? can you be a little bit more specific about the flow aspect? try and expand some of your feedback, it'll get easier the more you do
