you use too many intangibles. we don't care if it's religious, or not. at present while religion is apparent in the poem, little else is. the 1st stanza looked interesting then it got buried under words that really say the same thing and nothing. there's no depth no theme. just a question. where is god. i'm not sure that's enough in form put forward.
(08-05-2013, 07:20 AM)brandonalsip Wrote: I actually really enjoyed this poem and I am not religious in the slightest. It's really rather nice I think, especially for an early poem.why did you enjoy it? please give more than a stock reply