A War Hero

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I really loved this as soon as I started reading! It almost gave me chills as straight away it draws a vivid picture and gives a great sense of empathy. It did lose me a little toward the end, only because of some little things such as "but unfortunetly he cant resist being modified" seemed a little out of place, I think the sentence was too long, great line though, just needs to be shortened a little.
Overall I loved it, top job