You Are
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(08-01-2013, 01:22 AM)jdguyb Wrote:  I have no idea where your going with this one. Nothing makes sense here. How is a laugh a scar from a childhood rumor? This makes no sense. The whole thing seems random
Forgive me for confusing you. When I first wrote this poem the lines were as follows:

you are a raunchy, sordid sense of humor
you are a piercing laugh heard for a mile
you are a scar from a childhood rumor
you are a crooked smile

etc...

then at the end:

my love, you are a side effect
perfectly imperfect

but I decided to take out all of the "you are"s because it became way too repetitive, so now it's the title. Does this clear up your confusion?


Messages In This Thread
You Are - by TheWall0912 - 07-31-2013, 10:45 PM
RE: You Are - by rowens - 07-31-2013, 10:58 PM
RE: You Are - by jdguyb - 08-01-2013, 01:22 AM
RE: You Are - by TheWall0912 - 08-01-2013, 02:14 AM
RE: You Are - by newsclippings - 08-01-2013, 02:25 AM
RE: You Are - by Volaticus - 08-01-2013, 01:06 PM
RE: You Are - by whatispoetry? - 08-01-2013, 04:48 PM



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