Last words...

Last words...

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07-27-2013, 10:15 PM

(07-27-2013, 10:13 PM)rowens Wrote: The sentences are sloppy, so are the rhymes.

The rhymes run the thing mad.

Hello and thanks for the feedback,

so any tips you can provide? modifications to the poem? or is it a scrap?

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Last words... - by Ghassan - 07-27-2013, 10:05 PM

RE: Last words... - by rowens - 07-27-2013, 10:13 PM

RE: Last words... - by Ghassan - 07-27-2013, 10:15 PM

RE: Last words... - by Malu - 09-13-2013, 03:46 PM

RE: Last words... - by rowens - 07-27-2013, 10:20 PM

RE: Last words... - by Ghassan - 07-27-2013, 10:22 PM

RE: Last words... - by jdguyb - 07-28-2013, 03:55 AM

RE: Last words... - by Ghassan - 07-28-2013, 04:06 AM

RE: Last words... - by ellajam - 09-13-2013, 10:25 PM

RE: Last words... - by nhanna1223 - 02-03-2014, 02:07 AM

RE: Last words... - by Erthona - 04-07-2014, 06:02 AM

RE: Last words... - by California - 04-07-2014, 07:20 PM

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