07-27-2013, 05:57 PM
Hi Bunx,
still on my first couple of reads with this one but wanted to offer some encouragment and to say this one deserves a few more reads still.
I am getting a picture of a broken virtual relationship. I think you have done a great job with some of the imagery and the story is strong. I love the little twists of humour woven into the telling of the seperation pain.
This is misc so no crit unless you ask for it. But i do think this one could be moved into a crit board and stand up well.
All the best. AJ.
still on my first couple of reads with this one but wanted to offer some encouragment and to say this one deserves a few more reads still.
I am getting a picture of a broken virtual relationship. I think you have done a great job with some of the imagery and the story is strong. I love the little twists of humour woven into the telling of the seperation pain.
This is misc so no crit unless you ask for it. But i do think this one could be moved into a crit board and stand up well.
All the best. AJ.