07-27-2013, 10:55 AM
That the artist is recreating himself and giving it away is evident and nicely done.
The method of capitalization has a random feeling and I think you'd be better to just capitalize properly-- or even capitalize the start of every line, but it needs to be more consistent. For example:
All-in-all, I thought that it felt fresh the way you said what I have often thought in a new way: My gift is my curse.
Thanks for sharing
The method of capitalization has a random feeling and I think you'd be better to just capitalize properly-- or even capitalize the start of every line, but it needs to be more consistent. For example:
Quote:Being an artist requires suicide,
after each stroke of the paint brush. --lowercase start mid-sentence
And after each new pencil tip, canvas, or sculpture,
An artist must be reborn. --uppercase start mid-sentence
All-in-all, I thought that it felt fresh the way you said what I have often thought in a new way: My gift is my curse.
Thanks for sharing

