shunned
i'll have to take a look but on the face of it it could be a number of things,
it was simply not gotten to (many poems pass by without someone seeing it)
i couldn't be bothered giving feedback cos i was doing something else.
poems don't really hit nerves, specially poems that aim to hit nerves (as you impy with one
)
if verse-atility is the only poem of yours that's shunned you're very fuckin' lucky, i started the forum and many of mine have not only been shunned but shit upon as well. :J:
but i shall take a look and see why it was passed over by me at least.
i'm back.
and yes, as the song goes, "i remember it well"
i gave two examples above, there is a third of which i was hoping this was not.
the poem has too much wrong with it to be in mild or serious. i'm averse to moving poetry to novice unless it's an absolute novice poem. your poem has enough wrong with it that picking out 1 or 2 points wouldn't be fair, and picking out all of them may have been too much...(heartbreaking even) and i don't say that in a mocking way. i've posted many spoems of similar stature in my time. but i'll give it some feedback now.
but you asked why i never left a reply so now i have and may i say, i regret doing so with all my heart. you have written much better poetry than verse-atility
i'll have to take a look but on the face of it it could be a number of things, it was simply not gotten to (many poems pass by without someone seeing it)
i couldn't be bothered giving feedback cos i was doing something else.
poems don't really hit nerves, specially poems that aim to hit nerves (as you impy with one
)if verse-atility is the only poem of yours that's shunned you're very fuckin' lucky, i started the forum and many of mine have not only been shunned but shit upon as well. :J:
but i shall take a look and see why it was passed over by me at least.
i'm back.
and yes, as the song goes, "i remember it well"
i gave two examples above, there is a third of which i was hoping this was not.
the poem has too much wrong with it to be in mild or serious. i'm averse to moving poetry to novice unless it's an absolute novice poem. your poem has enough wrong with it that picking out 1 or 2 points wouldn't be fair, and picking out all of them may have been too much...(heartbreaking even) and i don't say that in a mocking way. i've posted many spoems of similar stature in my time. but i'll give it some feedback now.
but you asked why i never left a reply so now i have and may i say, i regret doing so with all my heart. you have written much better poetry than verse-atility