Shorties
#2
I'm not sure what you mean by the line "So I can smoke something, then never forget." I feel like you can go into more detail here. Maybe a different word choice. Just my opinion though! Other than that I really like it. S2 is really well written. I enjoyed your last line very much because it was a nice play on words.
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Shorties - by Bunx - 07-25-2013, 02:13 AM
RE: Shorties - by TheWall0912 - 07-25-2013, 04:10 AM
RE: Shorties - by Bunx - 07-25-2013, 04:33 AM



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