07-23-2013, 05:18 AM
maybe you can get into more detail. Details like certain battles in the war. Playing with this will expand the length of your poem nicely. also the last line has a typo in it. it should be "Soldiers". Unless your coming from somewhere I can comprehend, I cant imagine where. I understand it may be hard to find rhymes while expanding your poem but use a thesaurus or something! I just wish your poem was longer, like TheWall0912 said, war is an interesting thing to write about, there is plenty of ways of making your poem longer while on the topic of war. War is a huge topic! Sorry I just don't like short poems