What will come of you (edit 2)

[R.C. KITCHENS]

Starring deeply into a mirror

Staring



watching the face as it glows,
the pupils pop behind the skin

The skin of your eyes?


and dance within the reflective
vessel.

If you stare long enough without
closing your eyes to blink

Could be a comma, but doesn't have to be



you will notice that the face begins
to blur, the cheeks darken.
Eyes that have grown weary,

That comma doesn't have to be here


turn red in agony and just above
the scalp there it is,

Could be a comma after scalp, but it doesn't have to be

The shadow of your reflection

You want the "The" to be capital?


staring right back at you

Finally got my computer back working,
Nice catches rowens, It wasnt my best effort. "The pupils pop behind the skin" I got to fix. The obvious misspelling and comma misplacement too. Appreciate the critique.

jdguyb, appreciate you reading. Laugh Giraffe and Vistaldust, your spot on to the underlying of the writing. Appreciate your reading.

Thanks for the help.