Short Lived Freedom

[LaughGiraffe]

I love the dark and morose tone of this poem. I'm not sure why but my favorite line is 'two hands are trembling violently and this night is why' LOVE! I also like that you left the story of why this murder was committed untold. It makes it mysterious. I agree with billy as far as the cliches, perhaps find a more original way to express the same sentiments. And also the 'sirens blaring in the distance not so far from me' is a little clumsy. But all in all I like!