07-17-2013, 09:41 PM
Some really nice pieces of imagery and wordplay in this, particularly "concentration's wreckage" and "empty nights and bottles turn
cold shoulders into cushions".
The lack of punctuation and the use of "thru" irks me slightly. The last 2 lines seem to lack some of the 'mystery' (for want of a better word) of the rest of the piece, although perhaps this is intended.
Enjoyed it, thanks
cold shoulders into cushions".
The lack of punctuation and the use of "thru" irks me slightly. The last 2 lines seem to lack some of the 'mystery' (for want of a better word) of the rest of the piece, although perhaps this is intended.
Enjoyed it, thanks