Nighttime Blue
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(07-14-2013, 01:10 PM)philoinlove Wrote:  Oh summers breeze, caress me with ease.
Fireflies fly ‘round my mind,
and entwine me with Earth's divine.

Spiritually, the sky sings to me as its
Nighttime blue hue blankets the trees.

Tonight the Orchestra is out
Cricket Waltz in C major serenades me.
oh sweet Jiminy I love your symphony
I'm surprised no one pointed out about the Earth part needing the 's. At least that's what I think it's.. I could be wrong though.

In the last stanza. I believe D major could possibly be more suitable :p

I really enjoyed this write as it makes me reflect on a few lsd experiences.
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Nighttime Blue - by philoinlove - 07-14-2013, 01:10 PM
RE: Nighttime Blue - by Brownlie - 07-14-2013, 07:49 PM
RE: Nighttime Blue - by rowens - 07-15-2013, 01:49 AM
RE: Nighttime Blue - by billy - 07-15-2013, 11:41 AM
RE: Nighttime Blue - by AndrewL - 07-17-2013, 04:13 AM



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