07-15-2013, 05:32 PM
This is a fine vent. I think spoken (ranted) aloud would have a huge impact whereas reading this doesn't really come across as it is might be intended. I would not bury it, but you could work on it a bit, there is good to be sieved. A few too many "fucks", you might go off in a different direction to avoid the annoying repetition. Just my opinion, to be binned at will. Of course the spelling issues need attending. Enjoyed it.
Best,
Heart
Best,
Heart

