Nighttime Blue

[billy]

it suffers from forced lines in the first stanza
and some punctuation problems.
these things are multiplied because of the shortness of the poem
the last stanza isn't too bad and works okay on it's own as a short three liner. i suggest posting in mild for a while

thanks for the read

Oh summers breeze, caress me with ease. [summer's,] forced breeze/ease
Fireflies fly ‘round my mind,
and entwine me with Earth divine. it's too ambiguous

Spiritually, the sky sings to me as its
Nighttime blue hue blankets the trees. needs a comma after hue

Tonight the Orchestra is out
Cricket Waltz in C major serenades me. an [a] or [the] might help the line
oh sweet Jiminy I love your symphony cap needed to start line