07-15-2013, 01:49 AM
Oh summers breeze, caress me with ease.
Could be summer's
Fireflies fly ‘round my mind,
The mark on round might be facing the wrong way; some might not think so, but I do. Round is a word already, but around tends to get more ground, and meaning.
and entwine me with Earth divine.
Spiritually, the sky sings to me as its
Nighttime blue hue blankets the trees.
Does "Spiritually" mean anything? And do you want "Nighttime" capitalized?
Tonight the Orchestra is out
Cricket Waltz in C major serenades me.
oh sweet Jiminy I love your symphony
Could be some commas in there, but it doesn't bother me.
Could be summer's
Fireflies fly ‘round my mind,
The mark on round might be facing the wrong way; some might not think so, but I do. Round is a word already, but around tends to get more ground, and meaning.
and entwine me with Earth divine.
Spiritually, the sky sings to me as its
Nighttime blue hue blankets the trees.
Does "Spiritually" mean anything? And do you want "Nighttime" capitalized?
Tonight the Orchestra is out
Cricket Waltz in C major serenades me.
oh sweet Jiminy I love your symphony
Could be some commas in there, but it doesn't bother me.