07-14-2013, 05:55 PM
Hi LG
i get a feel of drug use but nothing in depth. you use lots of words like freedom, misery articulates, feeling for heaven, and many more. instead of using these words, explain or show us what you mean, yesterdays limits snapped, we have no idea what those limits were? give the reader something less ambiguous, something less intangible. without the intro i'd have no idea what the poem is about.
thanks for the read.
i get a feel of drug use but nothing in depth. you use lots of words like freedom, misery articulates, feeling for heaven, and many more. instead of using these words, explain or show us what you mean, yesterdays limits snapped, we have no idea what those limits were? give the reader something less ambiguous, something less intangible. without the intro i'd have no idea what the poem is about.
thanks for the read.