Series of Limericks I'd like to have some feedback on.

[tectak]

IT may be a sort of absurd task to critique a Limerick but I'm curious.

Super Man

A Super superb man of steel
on film as an idol not real
the story the same
He fights in the fray
and evil is beaten in zeal Impossible to follow what with clumsy phrasing and random line start capitalising. The only line which reads clean is L4 but itmeans zilch.

He’s faster than bullets that bounce
On Muscles that twitch not an ounce Utter rot. Capital M? Twitching measured in weight?
He feels not a hint
Of pain yet the glint
Of justice he shines in a flounce. I cannot read any more. This is first year kindergarden and wholly unworthy of you. The "..glint of justice he shines in a flounce" is just so dreadfull it is almost brilliant...but not.

When beating on evil what is felt?
When fists are to break and to pelt
In faces so teeth
Are broken beneath
His pummeling blows that are dealt.

Just for fun I'll add one more:

To read this correct we suggest
That you syncopate and not rest.
Say limerick quite quick
Else meter is sick
The words must be properly stressed!

Hi brownlie,
Well, on first read this is bloody awful....but on subsequent reads it just gets worse and worse. I hope that satisfies your curiosity
No...you deserve more than that.
Limericks rely on solid and reliable rhythm with slick and accomplished rhyme...this has neither. There is something else,though. Neatness of purpose. You need to make a clean and witty point in each stanza...not flap about drowning in a soupy gruel. What you have done here is bend language to achievethe limerick form without any serious attempt to write english. It is so Yoda-esque that it could only be made worse if a Vogon edited it In fact, you could almost call this a genre being so bad it is good!
Best,
tectak
Repost in fun. It should not be here